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[Harold Harris]

I think the story would have been better if you had used a spell checker that is all

[dobbydog]

good story, however the spelling was horrible making it difficult to follow

[dobbydog]

sounds interesting.

what country are you from?

[Unregistered]

Try writing in english!

[cowgirlup]

I have to agree with the spelling thing.......

[Unregistered]

I don't think you should dream of being a writer, the speling was horrible. Some of that didn't even seem to be sentences. What kind of name is Ina?