I liked it very much. Great imagination.
It had a very nice style and relaxed sense to it.
I was expecting you to develop it a bit more.
But, that could be saved for chapter 2.
Seems like a three-part story.

At the end of part 2, just as you are about to commit suicide,
the scene shimmers and you awake in Lisa's arms.
It's a sunny morning and she is giving you your medications.
Who knows how it will end????