
01-02-2002, 08:47 PM
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Proof reading
You wrote (corrections in () ),
"Having been through a friendship that grew for me until it became a love.(this sentence has no subject really) A love of a muse. A love a strong spirit. A love of a mind and its thoughts. A love of a person for who they were. (These 4 previous sentences have no verb because you are using love as a noun)But my love was partially blinded to the fact that this person also had a dark side of black and whites. My honesty led to admission of this love, but my humanity and frustra(t)ions led to events that made me contradict myself. She coudn't comprehend, and quite frankly become so frightened she did something to me which has(,) and always will(,) hurt for the rest of eternity. She took away my dignity.
I believe in the one love. The love not of a life, but of existence. The meeting of the other half.(again these previous 2 sentences are not complete as they have no verb) Like the ancient greek belief that man and woman were one being that faced back to back, until the gods split them in two. And thus hence(you do not ned thus and hence, pick one) the two sides have always searched for one another.
I am looking for my best friend. I am looking for my soulmate. Until that time my live(s?)(life) will always be incomplete."
Sixsense,
Your content is beautiful. You can tell you really mean what you say. I only suggested the corrections as you originally mentioned it to be placed on a website. I hope my suggestions will be taken with the understanding that my only goal was to improve your chances of having your prospective new love interests see the beauty of your words and not grammatical distractions! Good luck in finding the one who will fit you perfect and make you whole again! Tootles!
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