very cool! thanks, osuche. *x*
i must admit, i'm
super happy (and relieved) a few people liked it. sometimes...well usually
...i write stuff that makes perfect sense in my head (especially when i experiment with non-traditional POV’s or do this "talking directly to the reader" thing i’ve been into with my last couple stories) and as i'm writing it, i'm positive that the tone that i tried to convey came across well, but when i go back to it later, i'm not so sure that i didn't just make it a really shitty story or one that's just plain too hard to read; like things i thought were obvious or funny or sensible that just ended up lost and confused in my characteristic over-use of punctuation, run-on sentences, and common speech syntax as opposed to the “rules of proper grammar."
as always, for those of you not so impressed, criticism is welcome...nae! encouraged. except for the typos
...i wish i were better at proofing my own stuff but i'm going to make a better effort at it in the future, take more time with my writing and not just put it on paper as fast as i can 'cause it feels like this frenzied race to get it all out of my head...like i'm afraid i'll forget what i wanted to type. and i will
really read it over in as much of an unattached manor as i can manage...maybe step away from it for a few days before i come back to proof...no matter how much it barks at the doggie-door of my brain.
shiii...i'm not even sure that ^^^ made sense
...and - as usual - i wrote too much.