I'm not worth a damn myself at writing erotica but I can tell you what one of my profs. told me back in the day in a journalism class. "If you are reporting the news, just report it. If you are writing fiction, go with what you picture the story to be and then try to take it a step further to explain it to your audience."

Not sure if that helps or not but it's something to think about.

For what it's worth, I think you're on the right track.

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Confucius say, "He who masturbate into cash register come into money."

An optimist looks at the glass and says it's half full. A pessimist looks at the glass and says it's half empty. A Cubs fan looks at the glass and says, "When's it gonna spill?"

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