Feedback for Rules1 By Cally
 

what did you guys think?


go easy on me.... i'm new! LOL

very hot......................
 

part one very sexy and hot ..............waiting for part 2 :hump: :hump: :thumb:

I like the story, but I'm confused.

In the story Ruby is talking to "him" and she tells him that she's going to meet her best friend Allison today at Starbucks.

Then this is what is in the story:
"After spending some time chatting and enjoying their time together, Ruby knew it was time to get down to business. She looked Julie dead in the eyes and said “I’m horny. I need you, right now”."

??

Other than that its GOOD stuff.

^^Yeah i picked up on that too..... Freudian slip I guess.... Cally love your storyline and am anxiously awaiting the remainder of the story!


Happy writing and playing around our site....Welcome!

oooo i missed that when i re-edited! see.... when i originally wrote and posted this story on a different site, one of the members' names was allison, and i didn't want her to think i had written the story about her, so i had to go back through and change the name....... but that one must have gotten by me LOL

*goes to fix it*

Bad, bad, girl
 

She broke the Rules on purpose. Hot :hot: hot :hot: hot!

Mmmm...

You know, I'm starting to acquire a taste for domination erotica.

I doubt it'll trump my big titty fetish, but who knows...I could be...made to love it more. :spank: