a love sonnet i just wrote... what do you think?
 

wrote this, going to give it to my bf. comments welcome :)

Gentle water trickling down your smooth skin,
Caressing the softness as it flows down,
Holding your heat in your heart deep within,
Nothing more than for me to wear the crown.

The drops of water saturates us through
Our bodies hold each other so tightly,
Knowing my fire never dies for you,
But it only grows more and more brightly.

No matter how hard the rain can ever fall,
Nothing can extinguish our fire here,
Deep inside our passion fueled hearts, our all,
Never false and wrong, but true and sincere.

The rain falls harder, but we do not care,
We are together; forever a pair.

lovely

He's a lucky man!

thanks :D

that was really sweet!

He'll love it raven18! It is beauty and love from the heart! What's not to love? TY for sharing!

:D I've written other poems for him before, want to see another?

He is very Fortunate to have LOVE such as Yours. (in this day and time it's so hard to find that kind of Love)

:D

lovely stuff... so so touching.... poem reminds me of Noah... *The Notebook*

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thanks :D

Definately a good poem.

Raven, that was beautiful. You are a very talented lady and he's a pretty lucky guy. :)