Feedback on Lunch and A Sexy Show?

[sunshine]

Hi.

I'm new. I wrote a story about coming home early for lunch.

Any feedback?


Sunshine

[Lilith]

Hi & welcome!

Here's a link to that story- Lunch (http://216.150.68.37/forums/showthread.php?p=1379642#post1379642)

[Aqua]

My only complaint would be that it ended too quick. ;) I wanted to hear more. :D

[sunshine]

My only complaint would be that it ended too quick. ;) I wanted to hear more. :D

Thanks. :o

It was my first shot at posting. I did put up another one that's quite a bit more.....um...descriptive, I guess. :)

Sunshine

[VeryLonelyMan]

Aqua pretty much summed it up for me too. Very nice.

[sunshine]

For those who like masturbation-type stories, I did another one about a striptease here: A Sexy Show (http://pixies-place.com:81/forums/showthread.php?t=30490)

There's nothing more fun than a striptease. :)

[kim Kelly]

Really liked it, short and sweet, reading your other stories and loving them.