Feedback please

[Mark Vieth]

Hey everyone. I have only posted one story here at the moment (an erotic story) . I am working on a second. I will even do a part 2 to my first Now I would just like some feedback on my first so I can get some idea as to what people thought of it.

[fzzy]

Hi Mark, if I haven't said it before now ... Welcome to Pixies. It is always great to have new writers join us ...

Here's a suggestion that worked well for me when I first came to Pixies (under a different name than the one I post under now) ... I read stories by others and paid attention to the ones I thought were good as far as how they told their stories, learned from the things I liked. I also formed friendships with several of the writers and commented publicly and privately on what I liked about their stories, etc.

Sometimes the really GREAT storytellers have to wait a bit (sometimes a very LONG bit) to get any comments because the story they tell has done such a great job for the reader that they need recovery time!

And for those who would like to read Mark's story .... click here

An Erotic Story (http://www.pixies-place.com:81/forums/showthread.php?t=23632)

[Mark Vieth]

fzzy did you actually read it though?

[fzzy]

Yes, I did ... have you read any of mine?

[Mark Vieth]

yeah one of them at least. What did you think of mine? That is what I wanted to know the most

[Lilith]

I read it. It's a good first try. Looking forward to seeing how your writing changes over time.